writing

toc __ ﻿ ﻿ 27th August 2010:__ We wrote some acrostic poems about the planets and the sun. We worked together to create the best acrostic poems using our knowledge of the planets and our own creative thinking!
 * synonyms ||  ||   ||   ||
 * cute || big || mum || adoorabull ||
 * fast || hut || door || quick ||
 * small || sand || yummy || tiny ||
 * short || legs || eye's || litttle ||
 * rest || mat || our || nap ||
 * pretty || at || green || handsim ||
 * happy || bat || blue3 || glad ||
 * by Gemma and Issy ||  ||   ||   ||
 * 13\12\10 ||  ||   ||   ||

** V ** enus is the easiest planet you can see **E**ven though it’s the second closest to the sun
 * Venus

**N**othing on Venus is cold except the rain

**U**p high in the sky

**S**urfaces are very, very hot on Venus because there are heat waves

By Cilla, Grace & Gemma ||  Mercury

** M ** ercury is the closest planet to the sun ** E ** verything is… ** R ** eally HOT!! It has lots of  ** C ** raters ** U ** nless you have a telescope it is  ** R ** eally hard for ** Y ** ou to see

By Henry, Xavier & Jamie || __16th August 2010:__ there are lots of planets in space. did you know that the planet we live on is EArth. the sun is not a plsnet. can you guess wot it is? it is a star. . __9th August 2010:__

Explanation Writing
We are learning how to write explanations and today we all had the chance to peel a carrot. By doing this we learnt how a peeler works and the name of each part. Here is our __brainstorm__ of what we found out (to help us structure our explanation) and a __video__ of the experience.

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28th July 2010:

Editing and Proofreading
We are learning how to __proofread__ our writing for spelling and __edit__ our writing by including more interesting words.

In the holidays I stayed at a scenic motel. I stayed at the motel with my family who are Mum, Dad and Madison. The motel was at Paihia and we went on lots of adventures. I went to Russel and Kerikeri and looked around. The best thing I saw was signs of famous people that died. I went on a wooden bridge that took us over a lake. By Gemma (proofread and edited by Room 14)

In the holidays my family went to Mt Cheeseman and I also skied. It was sososososososososo fun because when you have learnt how to ski you can do it by yourself! I even went down the mountain and it felt weird because the wind was blowing in my face and the snow was splatting onto my face too. By Tomas (proofread and edited by Room 14)

Similes

 * 29th April 2010:** We are learning how to use similes in our writing so our ideas are more descriptive. We used a character called Mr Bitter from the book 'Mr Bitter's Butter' to learn about writing great similes.

To be successful at writing similes about Mr Bitter we needed to:
 * select a part of Mr Bitter and compare it to something else.
 * use the words LIKE or AS in the simile.
 * include adjectives, verbs and nouns in our similes so a picture of our simile is created in our reader's head.

a baby crying. by Jamie ||=  ||= Mr Bitter is like a big baby. by Angus ||=  ||= Mr Bitter is as loud as a roaring lion. by Xavier ||=  ||= Mr Bitter’s bread is as delicious as a pancake. by Queenie ||=  ||= Mr Bitter’s bread is as <span style="display: block; font-family: Tahoma,Geneva,sans-serif; font-size: 110%;">delicious as ice cream. <span style="display: block; font-family: Tahoma,Geneva,sans-serif; font-size: 110%;">by Will ||=  ||= <span style="display: block; font-family: Tahoma,Geneva,sans-serif; font-size: 110%;">Mr Bitter’s hair is as pointy <span style="display: block; font-family: Tahoma,Geneva,sans-serif; font-size: 110%;">as a hedgehog. <span style="display: block; font-family: Tahoma,Geneva,sans-serif; font-size: 110%;">by Sarah || nice as an ice cream. by Gemma ||=  ||= <span style="display: block; font-family: Tahoma,Geneva,sans-serif; font-size: 110%;">Mr Bitter is like a <span style="display: block; font-family: Tahoma,Geneva,sans-serif; font-size: 110%;">big baby. <span style="display: block; font-family: Tahoma,Geneva,sans-serif; font-size: 11pt;">by Henr y ||=  ||= Mr Bitter’s clothes are as funny as a clown’s. by Lewis ||=  ||= Mr Bitter’s bread is as  tasty as jelly. by James ||=  ||= Mr Bitter is as silly as a clown. by Jasper ||=  ||= Mr Bitter’s nose is as big as his head. By Tomas || <span style="display: block; font-family: Tahoma,Geneva,sans-serif; font-size: 11pt;">angry as a <span style="display: block; font-family: Tahoma,Geneva,sans-serif; font-size: 11pt;">pirate. <span style="display: block; font-family: Tahoma,Geneva,sans-serif; font-size: 11pt;">by Cilla ||=  ||= <span style="display: block; font-family: Tahoma,Geneva,sans-serif; font-size: 110%;">His moustache is <span style="display: block; font-family: Tahoma,Geneva,sans-serif; font-size: 110%;">as silly as a pig <span style="display: block; font-family: Tahoma,Geneva,sans-serif; font-size: 110%;">with a lion’s <span style="display: block; font-family: Tahoma,Geneva,sans-serif; font-size: 110%;">head. <span style="display: block; font-family: Tahoma,Geneva,sans-serif; font-size: 110%;">by Madie ||=  ||||||  ||=   ||= <span style="display: block; font-family: Tahoma,Geneva,sans-serif; font-size: 110%;">Mr Bitter’s nose is as <span style="display: block; font-family: Tahoma,Geneva,sans-serif; font-size: 110%;">puffy as a balloon. <span style="display: block; font-family: Tahoma,Geneva,sans-serif; font-size: 110%;">by George ||=  ||= <span style="display: block; font-family: Tahoma,Geneva,sans-serif; font-size: 11pt;">Mr Bitter’s tantrum is like a baby crying for milk. <span style="display: block; font-family: Tahoma,Geneva,sans-serif; font-size: 11pt;">by Isabella || <span style="display: block; font-family: Tahoma,Geneva,sans-serif; font-size: 110%;">tantrum like a baby. <span style="display: block; font-family: Tahoma,Geneva,sans-serif; font-size: 110%;">by Olive ||=  ||= <span style="display: block; font-family: Tahoma,Geneva,sans-serif; font-size: 110%;">Mr Bitter has hair as <span style="display: block; font-family: Tahoma,Geneva,sans-serif; font-size: 110%;">pointy as cat’s ears. <span style="display: block; font-family: Tahoma,Geneva,sans-serif; font-size: 110%;">by Jessica ||=  ||= <span style="display: block; font-family: Tahoma,Geneva,sans-serif; font-size: 110%;">Mr Bitter’s shoes are <span style="display: block; font-family: Tahoma,Geneva,sans-serif; font-size: 110%;">as funny as a clown’s. <span style="display: block; font-family: Tahoma,Geneva,sans-serif; font-size: 110%;">by Zara ||=  ||= <span style="display: block; font-family: Tahoma,Geneva,sans-serif; font-size: 110%;">His bread is as tasty <span style="display: block; font-family: Tahoma,Geneva,sans-serif; font-size: 110%;">as cake. <span style="display: block; font-family: Tahoma,Geneva,sans-serif; font-size: 110%;">by Isobel ||=  ||= <span style="display: block; font-family: Tahoma,Geneva,sans-serif; font-size: 110%;">Mr Bitter’s bread is as <span style="display: block; font-family: Tahoma,Geneva,sans-serif; font-size: 110%;">yummy as chocolate. <span style="display: block; font-family: Tahoma,Geneva,sans-serif; font-size: 110%;">by Grace ||=  ||= <span style="display: block; font-family: Tahoma,Geneva,sans-serif; font-size: 110%;">Mr Bitter’s nose is as <span style="display: block; font-family: Tahoma,Geneva,sans-serif; font-size: 110%;">puffy as a blasting off <span style="display: block; font-family: Tahoma,Geneva,sans-serif; font-size: 110%;">rocket that is going <span style="display: block; font-family: Tahoma,Geneva,sans-serif; font-size: 110%;">to explode. <span style="display: block; font-family: Tahoma,Geneva,sans-serif; font-size: 110%;">by Bohemia ||
 * = <span style="display: block; font-family: Tahoma,Geneva,sans-serif; font-size: 110%;">Mr Bitter’s tantrum is like
 * = Mr Bitter’s bread is as
 * = <span style="display: block; font-family: Tahoma,Geneva,sans-serif; font-size: 11pt;">Mr Bitter is as
 * = <span style="display: block; font-family: Tahoma,Geneva,sans-serif; font-size: 110%;">Mr Bitter had a bad

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